wow
this is really powerful
one of your best i think
its very sad though
but maybe thats what makes me want to fav it
v good poem suzi xxx

"I had the perfect girl,
in this semi-perfect world.."

god i love this......so very much....painfully beautiful....thanks for sharing




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At first I just feel sorry for you
Oblivious to all that's sacred and true
Then I feel sorry for myself too
Cause to know is to hurt
And I know I do

Very well written... I like this a lot, your writing style is amazing.

This is FREAKIN' AMAZING!!! I lOVE IT!!!

Writing for a ticket to where you want to go, who you want to be, but the train is never coming.

...wasted it all
for just a little fun.


That is the most truthful lines in this poem. Good work.

awww that's sad so it's true?

I like this a lot.
I've been in a similar situation, thus I've written some poetry that has a similar idea as this one. Maybe I'll submit it today, check it out.

very interesting, I enjoyed it even though it was sad

Touching poem. I understand where you're coming from. I have a girlfriend who is exactly what I've always wanted, but I guess sometimes I still miss the "thrill of the chase" type thing. I've almost ruined our relationship because of it. I've never acted on it, but I've gotten close, and it's things like your poem that help me realize how much I'd be losing. If you still love this girl and she's not in love with some other guy, or even if she is, you should try and reconcile. Unless she's married there's always a chance. Swallow any kind of pride or nervousness, you'll get nowhere if you're too scared to move. Invite her to something noncommittal like coffee shop, but also somewhere you can talk. I feel like I'm being terribly intrusive, but I'm a poet true, and I'm really terrified of ending up in the same type of situation.

I really love the line

"and I threw it all away
for something I never even wanted."

That's exactly how I've always thought I'd feel about it if I messed things up. Thanks. Your poem means alot to me.

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The poem is great, though I'll never understand why people space good poems in the fashion such as this ..

But about the subject-matter of the poem.. I know the feeling, partially

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I thank my God upon every remembrance of you.
(Phil. 1:3);
Find the home where you belong;